Formal Letter

 

Subject: An Introduction About Myself

Dear Professor Brad,

                   This letter serves as a self-introduction about me. My name is Kenneth Soo, and I am currently studying in the robotics systems course at the Singapore Institute of Technology and also a part of your class in the critical thinking and communication module.

             A brief backstory, I graduated with a Diploma in Mechanical Engineering at Singapore Polytechnic in 2019. Although hoping to pursue my interest in Programming and Information Technology, I ended up choosing this course as it was the closest to my specialization of machine design back in my third year of polytechnic studies. My final year project had me programming a programmable logic controller, which used a different form of programming from the one we were taught during programming classes, but with challenges I thoroughly enjoy solving as I am an avid enjoyer of puzzles as well. I believe this was a factor leading me to pursue this course. However, puzzle solving is different from real world problem solving, and I hope to learn more critical thinking skills in order for me to tackle problem solving.

                        In terms of communication, I do find myself on the weaker end as I get really shy and timid when talking to people I rarely interact with or have just met for fear of overstepping boundaries. I hope to overcome this weakness by partaking in your classes and that I can be more confident in my speech. In terms of strengths, I believe that I am able to enunciate words well, and have a good command of grammar. I only expect myself to improve steadily while picking up what I am lacking as I engage in your classes.

                In conclusion, my aim while being in your class is to both improve on my speech and presentation, as well as learn more critical thinking skills. Thank you for taking the time to read this letter. If you do have any questions or queries, please feel free to ask me.


Yours Sincerely,

Kenneth Soo


Edit:

(30/09/2021) Read Timothy's and Yu Xin's messages and amended accordingly to the best of my knowledge. Read Professor Brad's message and amended sentence structure.


Comments

  1. Timothy LeeSeptember 16, 2021 at 10:58 PM

    Hello Kenneth,

    I loved the flow of your letter, it showed your progression and decisions made to where you are today. Your ability of self-awareness is evident when you wrote specifics on how you want to develop in the future.

    Just a few points that you may want to take note of.
    1. How you start sentences to link previous sentence, for instance, "And while ....". I feel that you can start off without the word and.
    2. In addition, there might be paradox in this phrase "machine design back during my".
    3. More of a personal opinion, it might be easier on the eyes to have a higher contrast between the background and the text: light grey.

    Overall, 'tis great letter. If you require clarification, do let me know.

    Regards
    Timothy Lee

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    1. Kenneth SooSeptember 30, 2021 at 12:26 AM

      Hi Timothy,

      Thank you for taking the time out to read and evaluate my letter as well as giving your feedback on it. As per your suggestion I have raised the contrast between the background and the text for better viewing.

      Regards,
      Kenneth

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  2. yuxinSeptember 23, 2021 at 12:04 PM

    Hi Kenneth,

    I enjoyed reading your letter knowing how you got interested about Robotics Systems and how far you have come. It was interesting to know what you did for your final year project in your final year in SP. Your letter has a good flow to it but there are some language errors in your letter such as
    1. Timothy has mentioned this but "machine design back during my..." has a weird flow to it
    2. Your subject should be capitalized
    3. Lastly, "diploma in mechanical engineering" should be capitalized too.

    Thank you and if you have any questions, do let me know. :)

    Best Regards,
    Yang Yu Xin

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    1. Kenneth SooSeptember 30, 2021 at 12:27 AM

      Hi Yu Xin,

      Thanks for the feedback and clarification on the capitalization. I have amended them to hopefully be better.

      Regards,
      Kenneth

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  3. Brad BlackstoneSeptember 29, 2021 at 12:29 PM

    Dear Kenneth,

    Thank you for this richly detailed letter. You’ve covered the scope of the assignment very well and managed to explain what makes you special. Among others points, we readers learn how your experience programming a programmable logic controller as well as having an interest in solving puzzles has helped you develop an interest in robotics.

    In the letter, you also do an admirable job explaining your comm skills strength, being a clear speaker, and a perceived weakness, being hesitant in front of a group. (Honestly, so far in class you strike me as being anything but shy!) Hopefully, you'll take the Zoom mode lessons as yet another opportunity to share openly with me and your peers.

    You also mention that language use is one of your strengths. Of course, one can always improve. While your writing in this letter seems mostly error-free, there are a few minor issues with phrasing:
    -- which used a different form of programming that we were taught > which used a different form of programming from the one we were taught
    -- I hope to overcome this weakness of mine partaking in your classes and be more confident in my speech... >
    I hope to overcome this weakness participating in your classes and that I can become more confident in my speech
    -- In terms of strengths, I believe that I am able to enunciate words well, along with a good command of grammar.
    >
    In terms of strengths, I am able to enunciate words well and have a good command of grammar.
    -- to both improve on my speech and presentation, as well as learning more critical thinking skills. > (lack of parallel structure)

    I look forward to reading more of your writing this term.

    Cheers,

    Brad

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    1. Kenneth SooSeptember 30, 2021 at 12:41 AM

      Dear Professor Brad,

      Thank you for taking out some time to read and give your feedback and opinions on this letter. I will amend the sentence structures accordingly.

      I look forward to having your classes and improving in my writing skills.

      Regards,
      Kenneth

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